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在沪江关注考试英语的沪友岁岁丰玉遇到了一个关于英语四级的疑惑，并悬赏500沪元，已有7人提出了自己的看法。
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The Athletes I Admire Most
The athlete I admire most is Liu Xiang who is a famous hurdling athlete of China.At 2004 Olympic Games he equaled the world record and became the champion of male 110m hurdles,Which is a proud of China.At 2006,he even broken the world record by12'88.At that time he became the centre of a media circus again.
I admire Liu Xiang not only for his records,but also for his confidence and excellent quality.He represents the sport spirit of China--we can win the champion,so don't look down us.Liu Xiang holds an opinion that the good record isn't his end and he can run faster.It proves he never give up pursuing his dream.I like this quality and whenever I want to be loose,I will use it to remind myself.
Liu Xiang have said,& For some players, it’s just a job. For me, it’s what I love.&I love this words very much and want to share with you.Regard your job as what you love or choose the job what you like,only in this way can you enjoy your life and have a well done.
Even Liu Xiang can't participate in the 2008 Beijiig Olymipic Games for the injury of his lift foot,it doesn't hinder I admire him most.I expect he will bring us a big surprise at the next Olympic Games.
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写的很好了！
—— 曹慧caohui137
同桌你写完了文章可以先贴到Word里面进行检查之后再贴过来哦~~~这样会省很多功夫滴~~
还有哦，写文章很看格式滴，你要确保每个句子都是xx. &ox&
的格式哦。
每个句子写完了一个标点结束，空一个英文空格之后开始新句子，新句子如果有引号什么的就不要再在引号里面空格了。
还有中文标点’跟英文标点'也是不同的哦~~
英文作文要用直引号，不能用弯引号。
it’s跟it's是不同的，看出来了么？那个逗点……
只能帮你改到这个地步啦~~主要改的还是些格式神马的~~我承认我比较无聊~~
你写的其实很不错啦~~
The athlete I admire most is Liu Xiang who is a famous hurdling athlete of China. At 2004 Olympic Games he equaled the world record and became the champion of male 110m hurdles, which is a proud of China. At 2006, he even broke the world record by12'88. At that time, he became the center of a media circus again.
I admire Liu Xiang not only for his records, but also for his confidence and excellent performance. He represents the sport spirit of China--we can win the champion, so never look down upon us. Liu Xiang holds an opinion that the good record isn't his end and he can run faster. It proves he never give up pursuing his dream. I like this spirit and whenever I want to be loose, I will use it to remind myself.
Liu Xiang has said, &For some players, it's just a job. For me, it's what I love.& I love these words very much and want to share with you. Regard your job as what you love or choose the job you like, only in this way can you enjoy your life and have a well done.
Even Liu Xiang cannot participate in the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games for the injury of his left foot, it does not hinder the fact I admire him most. I expect he will bring us a big surprise at the next Olympic Games.
—— Ereth
在多少年应该用in吧。he even broke 而不是broken。第一段最后一句我觉得应该用he attract the attention of media 更好。
look down upon sb
it proves that he never....
第二段最后一句I like his spirit and whenever I am loose, it will encourage me.
第三段I like these words
choose the job that you like 还有后面把only去掉太局限了，有的没有工作的也很嗨啊。还有in this way又是一句话了，前一句要用句号。
最后一段 第一句用couldn't 已经是过去的事了都好后面要加but。most 前面要加the。一般说give a surprise.而不是bring.
有不对的地方多包涵。
—— 多啦A喵
第一段的at是对的 ，表示的是在这个比赛期间而不是那一年。
a pride of China
look down on/upon ``
it proves that he never gives````
Liu xiang has said```
have it well done
是lift foot 还是left？
其他的还看得过去
有不对的地方求指点
—— keithyoung
The Athletes I Admire Most
The athlete I admire most is Liu Xiang who is a famous hurdling athlete of China. In 2004 Olympic Games he equaled the world record and became the champion of the male 110m hurdles competition, which is a proud of China. In （年份前面用in作介词） 2006, he even broke （这里不需要用过去分词） the world record by 12'88.（这个地方表述不清，改成by running to the finish line in 12’88会好些）At that time he became the centre of a media circus（这个词不太适合，用concern会好些） again.
I admire Liu Xiang not only for（这里用because of） his records, but also for （这里的for可以省略）his confidence and excellent quality. He represents the sport spirit of China--we can win the champion,so don't look down （这里应该加一个on） us. Liu Xiang holds an opinion that the（这里用a会好些） good record isn't his end and he can run faster. It proves he never give up pursuing his dream. I like this quality and whenever I want to be loose, （这个说法不地道，改成whenever I slack off）I will use it to remind myself.
Liu Xiang has said,& For some players, it’s just a job. For me, it’s what I love.&I love these words very much and want to share with you. Regard your job as what you love or choose the job what （这里应该是as） you like, only in this way can you （这里不需要倒装） enjoy your life and have a well done （这里应该是done a good job）.
Even (这里用although或 even though) Liu Xiang can't participate in the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games for the injury of his left foot, it doesn't hinder （这里用affect或者stop比较好）I admire him most（这个说法也不地道，改成a lot会好一些）. I expect he will bring us a big surprise in the next Olympic Games.
楼主你好，你的essay写得很好了，上面只是根据我的个人经验改的，我现在在国外留学，所以也在学习中，有几个可以注意的地方—时态、单复数和拼写
—— janelovedog
我最欣赏的运动员
我最羡慕的是运动员刘翔,一位著名的跨栏赛跑运动员。他在2004年奥运会与世界纪录,成为男性110米栏的冠军,这是一个值得骄傲的。在2006年,他甚至打破了世界记录by12 ' 88。那时,他成为了一个媒体中心马戏团了。
我钦佩刘翔不仅是对他的记录,但也为他的自信和优秀的品质。他代表了体育精神- - - -我们能赢得冠军,所以不要往下看我们。刘翔持有一个认为,良好的记录并不是他的结束,他能跑得更快。这样做可以证明他永不放弃追求自己梦想的人。我喜欢这个质量,每当我想要放松,因为我将用它来提醒自己。
刘翔曾说:“对于一些球员,只是工作。对我来说,这是我喜欢做的事。“我爱这句话非常想与你们分享。把你的工作或者选择你所热爱的工作,你想要的,只有用这种方式你才能享受你的生活,并有一个做得很好。
甚至刘翔不能参加2008年奥运会Beijiig恢复所玷污他的举起脚,但这并不妨碍我很钦佩他最多。我指望他会带给我们一个大惊喜在下届奥运会。
你写完了文章可以先贴到Word里面进行检查之后再贴过来哦~~~这样会省很多功夫滴~~
还有哦，写文章很看格式滴，你要确保每个句子都是xx. &ox&
的格式哦。
每个句子写完了一个标点结束，空一个英文空格之后开始新句子，新句子如果有引号什么的就不要再在引号里面空格了。
还有中文标点’跟英文标点'也是不同的哦~~
英文作文要用直引号，不能用弯引号。
it’s跟it's是不同的，看出来了么？那个逗点……
只能帮你改到这个地步啦~~主要改的还是些格式神马的~~我承认我比较无聊~~
你写的其实很不错啦~~
在多少年应该用in吧。he even broke 而不是broken。第一段最后一句我觉得应该用he attract the attention of media 更好。
look down upon sb
it proves that he never....
第二段最后一句I like his spirit and whenever I am loose, it will encourage me.
第三段I like these words
choose the job that you like 还有后面把only去掉太局限了，有的没有工作的也很嗨啊。还有in this way又是一句话了，前一句要用句号。
最后一段 第一句用couldn't 已经是过去的事了都好后面要加but。most 前面要加the。一般说give a surprise.而不是bring.
第一段的at是对的 ，表示的是在这个比赛期间而不是那一年。
a pride of China
look down on/upon ``
it proves that he never gives````
Liu xiang has said```
have it well done
是lift foot 还是left
第一段的at是对的 ，表示的是在这个比赛期间而不是那一年。
a pride of China
look down on/upon ``
it proves that he never gives````
Liu xiang has said```
have it well done
是lift foot 还是left？
其他的还看得过去
有不对的地方求指点
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第一段你可以说现在的大学英语4。很多人只会做题目。不过。以及反方的观点，这并不适合于交际场合，挺全。接下来就有了很多人认为有必要举行英语口语考试.6级考试只限于笔试和听力我个人认为你英语作文模板记的挺多。最后As far as I am concrened ，得学会灵活运用，并不能用英语表达自己的思想观点
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明显是病句，越该越错啊1 but the meaning of friendship is different for each person?此处though 和 but不可以一块用;t it right,tcount on our friends&#39.
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否则单薄些，advice加个复数吧，这里没有转折。第八,need加复数，may help改为should have helped ，非谓语动词，understand应该是现在分词形式。第三通篇文章不错。第二。第六。楼主要是能用倒装，different后改为with each other，cannot改为shouldnot还有count it on。第四，定语从句的话文采就好的多，it gives改成it hands，we are both normal改为both ordinary，但有几个问题必须改正，but去掉。第五，but don&#39。第七,the most改为t的but改为moreover，祈使句。手机答的，希望对楼主有帮助。第一
第一行中be different from 是固定搭配，第四行中的一个句子里不能同时出现though和but 去掉一个就好了。总体还行吧，就是中国式英语太明显了，通篇句式没亮点，那几个反意疑问句我也不确定有没有问题
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